Template:Did you know nominations/Seoul Independent Film Festival

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The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: rejected by Jolly Ω Janner 04:43, 17 January 2016 (UTC)

Seoul Independent Film Festival

Seoul Independent Film Festival 2015
Seoul Independent Film Festival 2015

Created by Gong Ju-young (talk). Self-nominated at 04:54, 15 December 2015 (UTC).

Template:Ping Thanks for the article, but do you think you could suggest a better hook, it's kind of obvious being in Seoul!♦ Dr. Blofeld 11:17, 19 December 2015 (UTC)

Suggestion: ALT1: ... that the Seoul Independent Film Festival was initially the Korean Youth Film Festival? -Freekee (talk) 01:07, 30 December 2015 (UTC)

How about ALT2: ... that some of the works at the Seoul Independent Film Festival go on a city tour called an "indie picnic". The Squirrel Conspiracy (talk) 16:59, 3 January 2016 (UTC)
  • Symbol question.svg The article is new enough and long enough, neutral and well-sourced. Either ALT1 or ALT2 work. The picture seems properly licensed, but is not very interesting. A spot check of the Korean sources using Google translate shows no problem – just the facts are being taken. The article makes extensive use of the festival's website, but not in a promotional way, so that should be acceptable. There are copyright problems with the English language sources:
  • Article: In the competition of the festival, nine homespun features and 45 shorts will vie for cash prizes amounting to 72 million won (about $68,000). Winners will be shown during the closing ceremony on Dec. A large portion of films focus on grim social issues in Korea, including rape, domestic violence, school bullying, the plight of migrant workers and dark moments in recent Korean history.
  • Source: In the competition of the fest, nine homespun features and 45 shorts will vie for cash prizes amounting to 72 million won (about $68,000) ... Winners will be shown during the closing ceremony on Dec. 6. A large portion of films focus on grim social issues in Korea, including rape, domestic violence, school bullying, the plight of migrant workers and dark moments in recent Korean history.
This needs paraphrasing. I suggest going over the other places English-language sources have been used, making sure the text has not just been copied, and paraphrasing where needed. Also, it needs a native English speaker to copy edit. Some of the language is very hard to follow: "Next, the Best Picture Award is a selecting to Grand prize work in competition and award cash prize, plaque. And the Excellent picture award is selecting to superb work in competition and award cash prize, plaque. "
The article is not ready for the front page in its present state. (Note: I will be traveling for the next few weeks so may not be able to follow up this review.) Aymatth2 (talk) 13:35, 4 January 2016 (UTC)