Template:Did you know nominations/Ananda Thuriya of Kanba Myint

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The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:41, 6 January 2016 (UTC)

Ananda Thuriya of Kanba Myint

  • ... that Ananda Thuriya, a chief minister, general and son-in-law of King Sithu II of Pagan, began his career in the royal security detail?
Reviewed: Ecocapsule

Created by Hybernator (talk). Self-nominated at 19:59, 22 November 2015 (UTC).

Symbol question.svg - There's some good and some bad.
Good
  • Meets all basic criteria (length, date, etc)
  • The notes are great
  • The sources, whilst AGF, seem really good
Bad
  • The following sentences should be more neutral
He proved to be a successful commander, and usually brought home the rebel leader. Legends grew about his bravery:
He considered his son-in-law Ananda Thuriya, an ethnic Mon and a proven military commander, a perfect fit for the region.
  • I'm fairly sure that the hook is based in reference #1 but could you please either confirm this and make it clearer or insert a different reference?

With those few tweaks we should hopefully be good to go! PanydThe muffin is not subtle 11:55, 20 December 2015 (UTC)

  • Thanks for the review, Template:Re. For the "successful commander" sentence, I've added two direct citations of which (Harvey 1925: 58) is available on line for reference. As for the second, it's based on the conjecture of Prof. Sein Lwin Lay, the editor of the Toungoo Yazawin chronicle, and I've updated the sentence to reflect that. Please check. Thanks. Hybernator (talk) 19:57, 24 December 2015 (UTC)
Symbol voting keep.svg - I'm really sorry Template:Re - I've been in the middle of the countryside with little to no access to the internet for the holidays. It looks fantastic. PanydThe muffin is not subtle 13:51, 5 January 2016 (UTC)