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The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 05:24, 2 August 2019 (UTC)

Afsarwala Tomb

Afsarwala Tomb
Afsarwala Tomb
  • ... that the Afsarwala tomb (pictured) contains the tomb of an officer whose identity is not known?

Created by Royroydeb (talk). Self-nominated at 05:14, 27 May 2019 (UTC).

  • Comments - QPQ needs to be done - There's no source for the hook, so that would need to be added. I'm happy with the hook, however. Meets length, copyvio and other checks. Add source and QPQ before passing. Symbol question.svg Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 08:18, 29 May 2019 (UTC)
Template:Ping Inline citation has been added. QPQ done. RRD (talk) 04:45, 30 May 2019 (UTC)
  • Symbol question.svg Hi, I came by to promote this, but I don't find the hook hooky. Anything built 1,000 years ago is bound not to have proper identification. Also, the word "tomb" is repeated in the hook, and the ending could be compressed into "an unidentified officer". Yoninah (talk) 20:29, 3 July 2019 (UTC)

Template:OdTemplate:Ping I think its hooky enough that the place is named "Afsarwala" after the "officer" whose identity is actually not known. Maybe we can tweek the hook as below:

ALT1: ... that the Afsarwala tomb (pictured) gets its name from the corrupted Persian version of the word "officer", although the identity of the officer whose tomb it houses is unknown?

§§Dharmadhyaksha§§ {Talk / Edits} 06:32, 5 July 2019 (UTC)

  • Template:Ping you're right, and that it is much better hook wording! Can we change the last "tomb" to "grave"? Yoninah (talk) 10:04, 5 July 2019 (UTC)
Yes! Thanks for that word. ALT2 is here. Template:Ping if you can review Alt2 then it would be great. §§Dharmadhyaksha§§ {Talk / Edits} 10:30, 5 July 2019 (UTC)
ALT2: ... that the Afsarwala tomb (pictured) gets its name from the corrupted Persian version of the word "officer", although the identity of the officer whose grave it houses is unknown?
  • Thank you, Template:U, ALT2 is a great hook. Now I looked at the source to verify it, and see that the source doesn't identify the occupant of the tomb as an officer, but "the one who raised it" as an officer. Yoninah (talk) 12:45, 5 July 2019 (UTC)
Yes! You are right. However, as you earlier said, the identity problem seems to remain here. I found out another source which says the monument maybe named after the officer who is buried in it. I have also modified the article to mention both the possibilities. §§Dharmadhyaksha§§ {Talk / Edits} 03:46, 9 July 2019 (UTC)
Any updates on this? Template:Ping -§§Dharmadhyaksha§§ {Talk / Edits} 06:35, 20 July 2019 (UTC)
  • Template:Ping Thank you for your work on the article. I edited the article again for English grammar. Now we need a new hook. Do you have an idea, or should I suggest one? Has Template:U abandoned this nomination? Yoninah (talk) 23:13, 20 July 2019 (UTC)
  • Symbol delete vote.svg Without the nominator, we don't have a nomination. Marking for closure, though if Template:U shows up, we can certainly proceed. Yoninah (talk) 00:59, 25 July 2019 (UTC)
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  • ALT2:... that unlike other Islamic buildings of the 16th century India, the Afsarwala mosque contains only one dome? RRD (talk) 15:06, 26 July 2019 (UTC)
  • Template:Ping thanks for ALT2. But the source doesn't confirm the statement "Unlike other buildings". It just says there's one dome. Yoninah (talk) 21:28, 27 July 2019 (UTC)
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  • Template:Ping thank you for the ALTs, though neither of them is hooky enough for the image slot. And it's a good image. What do you think about adding a little mystery to the hook?
  • ALT5: ... that the name of the Afsarwala tomb (pictured) translates as "Officer's tomb", but no one knows who is buried inside? Yoninah (talk) 23:36, 31 July 2019 (UTC)
Template:Ping. ALT 5 is good. RRD (talk) 09:16, 1 August 2019 (UTC)
  • Well, someone must know who is buried inside, just not anyone living. I like the term "unknown occupant" here. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 13:56, 1 August 2019 (UTC)
Symbol confirmed.svg no worries. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talkcontribs) 16:35, 1 August 2019 (UTC)
Thank you. Yoninah (talk) 17:05, 1 August 2019 (UTC)