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The following discussion is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by PFHLai (talk) 08:04, 14 December 2013 (UTC)

22 Parkside

Created by Gareth E Kegg (talk), Edwardx (talk). Nominated by Edwardx (talk) at 18:57, 7 December 2013 (UTC).

  • Symbol question.svg The article is recent enough and just makes the required length, by a whisker. The hook is adequately sourced. There are no obvious copyright violations. Unfortunately, the article seems disjointed. It's a bit promotional and contains trivia that I think should be removed. OTOH, there is a lot more about the design that could be mentioned, so I would suggest a partial rewrite.

    Specifically, stuff I believe should be removed includes the trivia that Ab Rogers lives there with his family – I mean, that aspect can be dealt with simply by saying it's been in use by Rogers' family since its construction. But that means more bytes need to be found. Here's where a better description would be of interest to the reader. After all, it's listed for its architectural merit, so we need to give it proper weight. I would suggest creating a section for it of at least one paragraph in length.

    The property is attracting attention due to its listing in the beginning of the year, and its being put on the market in July. We're not trying to sell the house, so I believe we may be dwelling too much on the asking prices for such a short article. I'd also mention that I usually detest pompous politicians' sound bites, and the one cited here is no exception. He agreed to list it, everyone else agrees it's architecturally significant. I would prefer a good substantial quote from English Heritage instead of the broken non-descript one currently in the article, if one could be found. -- Ohc ¡digame! 03:53, 9 December 2013 (UTC)

  • Thank you for your extensive and helpful comments. I've attempted to address all of them. Edwardx (talk) 11:28, 9 December 2013 (UTC)
  • Symbol confirmed.svg It's a considerable improvement, and I'm happy to sign off on it. Keep up the good work! -- Ohc ¡digame! 00:19, 10 December 2013 (UTC)
  • One small thing, the link in the hook should really be to the "Lloyd's building" rather than "Lloyd's of London", so I have tweaked that. Edwardx (talk) 00:34, 10 December 2013 (UTC)
  • Got the one in the article but missed this one, I did. ;-) -- Ohc ¡digame! 12:36, 10 December 2013 (UTC)