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The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by Yoninah (talk) 19:10, 11 April 2020 (UTC)

2020 Jawaharlal Nehru University attack

  • ... that Congress party described the Jawaharlal Nehru University attack as "state-sponsored terrorism", resembling those during the Nazi rule? Source: "Congress describing the rampage by masked goons as an example of "state-sponsored terrorism" reminiscent of Nazi rule." (source link )
    • ALT1:... that Deepika Padukone was subjected to massive criticism by members of the ruling BJP after her visit to stand in solidarity with the victims of the Jawaharlal Nehru University attack? Source: "After her visit to JNU, the actor was at the receiving end of immense criticism from members of the ruling BJP including Tajinder Bagga, who urged people to boycott her film." (Source: link [1])
    • ALT2:... that Deepika Padukone's visit to stand in solidarity with the victims of the Jawaharlal Nehru University attack was praised for standing up against a crackdown on dissent? Source: "as well as praise for being a rare Bollywood A-lister to stand up against a crackdown on dissent." (Source: [2])
    • ALT3:... that two police cases were filed against a victim of the Jawaharlal Nehru University attack? Source: "Jawaharlal Nehru University (JNU) students' union president Aishe Ghosh was named in two police cases filed in a span of four minutes on Sunday evening, shortly after she was taken to hospital bleeding from a brutal attack by a masked mob." (Source: [3])

Created by DBigXray (talk). Self-nominated at 18:53, 6 January 2020 (UTC).

  • Template:Reply to This is not a review but that hook is not acceptable as it is not neutral. We can't use an opposition party statement blaming an incident on a government especially with such inflammatory language as the above. Please consider offering another which has a more neutral point of view. Cowlibob (talk) 01:43, 9 January 2020 (UTC)
I have added 3 Alts. DBigXray 14:47, 9 January 2020 (UTC)
  • Symbol redirect vote 4.svg Full review needed, including of the ALT hooks. (I have struck the original one per Cowlibob.) BlueMoonset (talk) 01:55, 14 January 2020 (UTC)
  • Symbol delete vote.svg The nominator was indefinitely blocked earlier this month and then retired with a renamed username (hence the user and user talk are now redlinks), and when I queried at WT:DYK as to whether this should be continued or closed, the response was that the article needed significant work still, so I'm marking this for closure. BlueMoonset (talk) 03:35, 23 March 2020 (UTC)
BlueMoonset, the user wasn't blocked indefinitely. This review process can still continue and the article sorted out as needed. DTM (talk) 08:24, 23 March 2020 (UTC)
Symbol redirect vote 4.svg new review requested. edit: I will try making whatever changes are needed. DTM (talk) 08:26, 23 March 2020 (UTC)
This is not a full review, but I do have a couple questions. The current introduction mentions the BJP, which is not defined and people not from India would be unfamiliar with it as a political party. The introduction also makes no mention of any possible motives or causes for the attack. Some general comments on the hooks: While Deepika Padukone a known actress in India, she may not be a household name in the rest of the world, the ALT1 and ALT2 hooks offer little insight as to why she might have been involved. ALT3 seems counter-intuitive. Flibirigit (talk) 23:02, 26 March 2020 (UTC)
1. I have linked and expanded BJP in the lead for clarity.
2. Possible motives or causes for the attack in the introduction. Template:Working
Added a line to the lead. Done DTM (talk) 12:32, 1 April 2020 (UTC)
3. Hooks. Template:Working
DTM (talk) 08:16, 30 March 2020 (UTC)
  • Thanks for the progress so far. Flibirigit (talk) 02:43, 2 April 2020 (UTC)
  • Regarding the hooks, I do intend to propose one or two more, but for now, I have cut ALT1 and ALT2. You have written "ALT3 seems counter-intuitive". Does that mean ALT3 wouldn't do as a hook? DTM (talk) 13:00, 2 April 2020 (UTC)
  • My opinion on ALT3 is that it needs more context. It is confusing to me without more information. Some other suggestions for the article, are to have the citations appear in numerical order when there is more than one in a row. The article seems to be inconsistent in applying MOS:LQ. These are not DYK failures, but friendly suggestions. Flibirigit (talk) 04:42, 3 April 2020 (UTC)
  • The numerical order of the citations has been sorted and I have done a minor copyedit of the entire article, also trying to follow MOS:LQ.
ALT4: ... that St. Stephen's College, an elite Indian university, for the first time in 30 years, boycotted classes and came out to protest against the Jawaharlal Nehru University attack?
ALT4a: ... that students from St. Stephen's College, for the first time in 30 years, boycotted classes and came out to protest the recent attacks on universities in India including the Jawaharlal Nehru University attack? Source:St Stephen's College students boycott classes to protest CAA, NRC and JNU attacks; first such demonstration since 1990, a senior teacher at the college, said the last time students had actively boycotted classes was during the 109-day-long strike by DU teachers in 1982-83.
DTM (talk) 03:07, 4 April 2020 (UTC)
Symbol question.svg thanks for the updates and alternate hooks. I will start a review shortly. It's a lengthy read, it make take a couple days to digest everything. Flibirigit (talk) 03:57, 4 April 2020 (UTC)

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  • Questions
  1. In the first paragraph of the "Background" section, what is the source for "The semester registration with the increased fee was started by 1 January"?
  2. In the first paragraph of the "Investigation" section, what is the source for "No arrests have been made in the case as of 31 January"?
  3. In the "Questions raised over the police investigation" section, what is the source for "The article also questioned whether police were conducting a fair and unbiased investigation"?
  4. The section "Reality of FIRs and CCTV footage" is more than two thirds direct quotes. Some of the information should be summarized instead.
  5. The articles uses a lot of acronyms. Some are not defined at all. Is it possible to remove a few? For example CCTV could just be "camera".
Questions 1/2/3 addressed. Question 4 has been attempted. If more needs to be done on 4 please let me know. Question 5, some of the acronyms have been addressed.
ALT4b: ... that following the Jawaharlal Nehru University attack, students from St. Stephen's College, for the first time in 30 years, boycotted classes to protest?
Source:St Stephen's College students boycott classes to protest CAA, NRC and JNU attacks; first such demonstration since 1990, a senior teacher at the college, said the last time students had actively boycotted classes was during the 109-day-long strike by DU teachers in 1982-83.
ALT5: ... that an attack on Jawaharlal Nehru University was triggered by protests against a 150% fee hike?
Source: The university blamed the attack on a "group of students" opposing an ongoing admission process to register new students. It is widely believed that the statement referred to leftist students who have been protesting against the fee hike. (BBC) Officials had defended the 150% fee hike, saying it was "too subsidised". (BBC) Weeks of protest: On Monday, as hundreds of JNU students marched towards the Indian parliament in New Delhi, they were stopped and baton-charged by the police and paramilitary forces. Around 100 of them were also detained by the police.(Aljazeera)
DTM (talk) 12:13, 6 April 2020 (UTC)
Thank you for the changes, there has been substantial improvement. Sourcing issues have been addressed. The last paragraph of the "FIRs and closed-circuit camera footage" section is almost verbatim with the source. In ALT4b, the phrase "an elite Indian university" is subjective, and not supported in the corresponding "University and student protests" section in the article. The relevant sentence to support the hook contains the redundancy "In a rare instance on 8 January, for the first time in the last 30 years". I suggest removing "In a rare instance" since that is also subjective. ALT5 is catchy, and verified in the cited source, but I cannot find the phrase "150% fee hike" in the 2020 Jawaharlal Nehru University attack article. I see fee hikes in the background section, but not a percentage. Did I miss it somewhere? Flibirigit (talk) 08:10, 7 April 2020 (UTC)
"FIRs and closed-circuit camera footage" section checked for close paraphrasing. Suggestions to remove subjective phrases done.
I have added "150% fee hike" in to the article. DTM (talk) 10:53, 8 April 2020 (UTC)
  • Symbol confirmed.svg Thanks for the changes. Approving ALT4b and ALT5. Preference for ALT5. Both are verified with the provided sources, interesting to a broad audience, and properly cited inline. Article appears to adhere to all other DYK criteria. Flibirigit (talk) 01:13, 10 April 2020 (UTC)